Ah, yes, I definitely agree it's a bit problematic, that second section. I wanted to cut it, and I DID cut it down, but I couldn't work out a way to do without it and still explain wtf was happening in the scene, with the goggles, and everything. I am sure there is a way round it, but I couldn't find one. I tried to make the very first section as full on as possible to make up for it, but I don't know if it carries you through.... Hmm. I really appreciate this honest feedback! I just like talking about my story, tbh. It massages my ego ever so ;-)

Thank you again, darling!