I actually enjoyed it quite a lot from my initial read through and want to really sit down and read it without the distractions currently going on in my house and formulate a proper response.
You say the kink doesn't get as much time as you would have liked, but I have to tell you, on this one, I feel you have to play it very lightly. Especially with these two particular characters. What you can get away with in a pairing like Ron/Harry or the like that has a built in warmth from canon, could quickly turn mawkish and ridiculous in a pairing that has a built in tension from canon, without a fairly lengthy build up beforehand.
It's why I was pretty delighted to see that you chose this particular kink since (in my opinion) it is a really challenging one, regardless of pairing (the inherently non-sexual ones generally are)but most especially with this one. So thank you!
(And no, I don't consider this a proper response which I'll hopefully be granted a little quiet time to compose later.)
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You say the kink doesn't get as much time as you would have liked, but I have to tell you, on this one, I feel you have to play it very lightly. Especially with these two particular characters. What you can get away with in a pairing like Ron/Harry or the like that has a built in warmth from canon, could quickly turn mawkish and ridiculous in a pairing that has a built in tension from canon, without a fairly lengthy build up beforehand.
It's why I was pretty delighted to see that you chose this particular kink since (in my opinion) it is a really challenging one, regardless of pairing (the inherently non-sexual ones generally are)but most especially with this one. So thank you!
(And no, I don't consider this a proper response which I'll hopefully be granted a little quiet time to compose later.)