http://myfirstisfourth.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] myfirstisfourth.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] hpkinkfest 2016-02-17 08:40 pm (UTC)

Brilliant!

From the very outset the way you wrote Snape's pov intrigued me and drew me into the story. I loved how it was told and played out.

When you write about the tear trickling down Hermione's face and her telling him matter-of-factly about what had happened, all I could think of was the scene in the movie where she was abrely holding herself together while she forced herself to tend to Ron's wounds after the splinching accident...just after they escaped the Ministry. I read the rest of that bit with that level of emotion and restraint to Hermione's written voice as well because that seemed right. Beautifully done and handled I think.

The rest is just a bit of smutty goodness. LOL Hermione bathing Snape and trying to avoid the obvious. LOL Then her hesitance when she HAD to deal with the issue. I was a bit surprised when she climbed on top of him, really expecting the hand or blow job but that took nothing away. But then, the final section with Snape finiding Hermione later and pounding her good in the grocery store. YUMMY!! And the line about returning to Hogwarts made me chuckle. Lovely, well done story from you as usual. I really enjoyed it! :-D

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