“She was pregnant with my son!” Malfoy shouted at him. “I was finally going to be a father! And you ruined it! Why were you even there, Potter? Why are you always there?”
OMG! My heart was absolutely breaking for Harry during Draco's tirade. You did a fantastic job of writing how easy it is to lash out and take your grief/angst out on the nearest, most convenient target.
Malfoy’s merciless words had done what time hadn’t been able to. Harry stopped dreaming about that night they’d been together, and as soon as he stopped dreaming about it, it became easier to forget. For the first time in his life, he fell in love with someone, and they moved in together. He left for the office every morning with a slow meaningful kiss still clinging to his lips and fell asleep feeling sated and cherished. There were lilies on his mother’s birthday, breakfast in bed, and long autumn walks holding hands. People started talking of him as having a “partner,” not just a boyfriend. For the first time since he was a teenager, he didn’t spend Christmas Eve with the Weasleys. He started thinking in terms of “we.” He started feeling less alone.
Anybody who has ever survived the break-up of a friendship or relationship can relate to this passage. In just one short paragraph, you manage to bring the reader from heartbreak to healing. Beautifully written!!!
“I don’t blame you,” he said. “I never did. Even though I know I told you otherwise at St. Mungo’s.”
Harry dragged his sleeve over his eyes to wipe away the tears that’d started to fall. He’d been holding it all in for so long. That night . . . the sheen of ice, Astoria’s blue unseeing eyes, the delicate strand of pearls around her neck, her swollen belly . . .”
“You did everything you could,” Malfoy said. “I know that.”
Ahhhhhh ... that's much better now. They're on the road to recovery.
Breaking up with Adam was one of the hardest things he’d ever done.
They’d both cried, and Adam had yelled, and Harry had let him. He hadn’t meant for it to happen.
I really like this part for some reason. You did a wonderful job of showing that sometimes you just can't control your heart. Harry always had "a thing" for Draco that just wasn't going to go away. I also liked that Harry felt remorse over breaking up with Adam. You did an excellent job of portraying him with all his little flaws and not as some perfect super hero on a pedistool.
Normally, I'm not one to go in for kink fics. But hey ... being its you and how much I adore your writing, I couldn't resist. I can't wait to read the rest.
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OMG! My heart was absolutely breaking for Harry during Draco's tirade. You did a fantastic job of writing how easy it is to lash out and take your grief/angst out on the nearest, most convenient target.
Malfoy’s merciless words had done what time hadn’t been able to. Harry stopped dreaming about that night they’d been together, and as soon as he stopped dreaming about it, it became easier to forget. For the first time in his life, he fell in love with someone, and they moved in together. He left for the office every morning with a slow meaningful kiss still clinging to his lips and fell asleep feeling sated and cherished. There were lilies on his mother’s birthday, breakfast in bed, and long autumn walks holding hands. People started talking of him as having a “partner,” not just a boyfriend. For the first time since he was a teenager, he didn’t spend Christmas Eve with the Weasleys. He started thinking in terms of “we.” He started feeling less alone.
Anybody who has ever survived the break-up of a friendship or relationship can relate to this passage. In just one short paragraph, you manage to bring the reader from heartbreak to healing. Beautifully written!!!
“I don’t blame you,” he said. “I never did. Even though I know I told you otherwise at St. Mungo’s.”
Harry dragged his sleeve over his eyes to wipe away the tears that’d started to fall. He’d been holding it all in for so long. That night . . . the sheen of ice, Astoria’s blue unseeing eyes, the delicate strand of pearls around her neck, her swollen belly . . .”
“You did everything you could,” Malfoy said. “I know that.”
Ahhhhhh ... that's much better now. They're on the road to recovery.
Breaking up with Adam was one of the hardest things he’d ever done.
They’d both cried, and Adam had yelled, and Harry had let him. He hadn’t meant for it to happen.
I really like this part for some reason. You did a wonderful job of showing that sometimes you just can't control your heart. Harry always had "a thing" for Draco that just wasn't going to go away. I also liked that Harry felt remorse over breaking up with Adam. You did an excellent job of portraying him with all his little flaws and not as some perfect super hero on a pedistool.
Normally, I'm not one to go in for kink fics. But hey ... being its you and how much I adore your writing, I couldn't resist. I can't wait to read the rest.