This was great. Really hot and sensual, and beautifully written. I love the contrast you drew between the way the rest of the world sees Harry and what Charlie sees.
His mouth is parted around slow, even breaths, lower lip plump and red, and I know that it’s evidence of what we did last night, but it looks so much like he’s been biting down on it in concentration, staring down a dragon before raising his wand and shouting Accio Firebolt!
What a cleverly multi-layered observation this is. I felt like between the lines there was a hint of the world outside the story, where we, the readers, are the ones who can see more than one reason why Harry's lip might be red. Brilliant.
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Date: 2015-02-11 04:05 pm (UTC)His mouth is parted around slow, even breaths, lower lip plump and red, and I know that it’s evidence of what we did last night, but it looks so much like he’s been biting down on it in concentration, staring down a dragon before raising his wand and shouting Accio Firebolt!
What a cleverly multi-layered observation this is. I felt like between the lines there was a hint of the world outside the story, where we, the readers, are the ones who can see more than one reason why Harry's lip might be red. Brilliant.