You know, I was secretly hoping that you would pick one of my prompts. The way you write is sublime. I adore your prose, your plots... the way you intricately weave a scene together. You have done all that and more here. The kink is referenced beautifully -- I love the subtle changes to her voice. She lectures, she pauses, she considers, she commands. She is a whole woman here, she lives and breathes. I felt like she was speaking to me.
May I say, too, that I particularly loved how she spoke? The rhythm of it, and the words you have her use. I mean, this is a great example:
“An art lost until, believing this to the be answer to what ails you, I began to look.”
It's formal, almost archaic language, but it's so her. Ohhhhhh. I love it. Severus... you never stood a chance :-D
And, on that note -- ohhh. Thank you for giving me my favourite Severus -- post-war Headmaster. Thank you for turning his experience into something ethereal, earthy and healing, not to mention gorgeously sensual. His raw honesty, and that lovely note of shyness at the end.
The coupling was beautiful. Stunning. It kept in with the enthralling atmosphere of the beginning, so it was almost dreamlike. I really, really loved it. It took me to another place in my mind - not even smut-related, but just somewhere other-worldly, and open, and calm. You've cast a spell here, love, and I'm so, so thankful to you for choosing to work with the prompt.
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Date: 2017-02-27 11:06 am (UTC)You know, I was secretly hoping that you would pick one of my prompts. The way you write is sublime. I adore your prose, your plots... the way you intricately weave a scene together. You have done all that and more here. The kink is referenced beautifully -- I love the subtle changes to her voice. She lectures, she pauses, she considers, she commands. She is a whole woman here, she lives and breathes. I felt like she was speaking to me.
May I say, too, that I particularly loved how she spoke? The rhythm of it, and the words you have her use. I mean, this is a great example:
“An art lost until, believing this to the be answer to what ails you, I began to look.”
It's formal, almost archaic language, but it's so her. Ohhhhhh. I love it. Severus... you never stood a chance :-D
And, on that note -- ohhh. Thank you for giving me my favourite Severus -- post-war Headmaster. Thank you for turning his experience into something ethereal, earthy and healing, not to mention gorgeously sensual. His raw honesty, and that lovely note of shyness at the end.
The coupling was beautiful. Stunning. It kept in with the enthralling atmosphere of the beginning, so it was almost dreamlike. I really, really loved it. It took me to another place in my mind - not even smut-related, but just somewhere other-worldly, and open, and calm. You've cast a spell here, love, and I'm so, so thankful to you for choosing to work with the prompt.