You know what's funny? I read this because (well, you wrote it, but even so, I'm unlikely to click on this pairing) I was assured this is not a romantic story. But, after reading it, for the first time I find myself wanting to see some romance between those two. But also NOT. Not in this story. If it had actually happened here, it would completely throw me, but I love that I was left with this hopeless wish and so much sympathy for both of them. Both Harry's DNW reaction and Scorpius's God, please, please, please. I love that it was painful, because I didn't expect to ~feel much at all, but you made me care and ache, and a part of me wants to see/imagine a few-years-later!H/Sc story, but, again, also not.
So yeah, like, basically, you corrupted me. >.>
Like you did with that Lucius/Harry story. DAMN YOU. *fistshake*
Okay, actual review: I loved the setup. I mean, I love 'fuck or die' scenarios. Like, A LOT. But what I really appreciate is the simplicity of your consummation box explanation. The 'fuck or die' plot device is the most obvious plot device in the history of obvious plot devices, and I (normally, in this context) find long explanations/complicated magical theories so distracting/unnecessary and ultimately implausible in their desperate goal to be plausible. The quick, no-nonsense setup you offered feels respectful of readers' intelligence. And it helps that Harry knows why and how because when Harry's reaction is "wait, what, this exists in the magical world?" then that's my reaction, too, because you're right, Harry, we never heard about it. But with grownup Harry knowing these things, with him showing us that yes, it totally exists, I know, I'm an Auror and have been here in the WW for years, so I KNOW, it gives the whole thing an air of plausibility, which I didn't expect to see. So, yes, cleverly done.
I love the flashback scenes throughout, showing us Scorpius's character and quick, vivid sketches of James, Rose and Al. I love that they were in the past tense. /structure-gasm <3 <3 <3
I have to mention the hair-ruffling scene especially because it perfectly illustrates why the sex scene worked for me so well. It's just, Harry; this Harry is so epilogue!Harry. Kind and gentle and affectionate, but also firm when he needs to be and just so fatherly. Which, unf. And that's him in that sex scene. Still so damn fatherly, even after getting pushed in that sexual encounter. I felt for him so much but at the same time, unf. God, Harry. It pushed all my uncomfortably-hot and fatherly!Harry buttons. And Scorpius, with daddy issues written all over him, wanting Harry to ruffle his hair and wanting Harry to fuck him. And I don't identify with him in that, but man, do I understand him and he breaks my heart with his wants.
And I love, love, love that Harry tried to Obliviate him (after spending a restless night at his desk. sdjfhsdkjfhksd. God, Harry, what you do to me!) And I ADORE that he didn't. That, more than anything, was the kind of heroism that made me think, Oh! Only you, Harry. Only you. Because, my God, the consequences; I don't even want to think about them and Harry was fully aware of them, but Scorpius begged and Harry just couldn't and not casting that spell was so brave. I loved Harry in that moment so much. SO MUCH. *heartseyes*
And this this this:
My body throbs where he was inside me. Harry Potter. My first. That one little piece of his heart is mine and I'll always have it. I'll lock it up tight and keep it safe where no one can touch it and no one can take it away.
*groan* As much as I'm distressed because of what Harry will have to face, I'm so happy (or, happily heartbroken) for Scorpius, because he has this and he wanted it so much and he gets to keep it, and God, you stupid, poor, darling boy.
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Date: 2012-02-28 01:13 pm (UTC)So yeah, like, basically, you corrupted me. >.>
Like you did with that Lucius/Harry story. DAMN YOU. *fistshake*
Okay, actual review: I loved the setup. I mean, I love 'fuck or die' scenarios. Like, A LOT. But what I really appreciate is the simplicity of your consummation box explanation. The 'fuck or die' plot device is the most obvious plot device in the history of obvious plot devices, and I (normally, in this context) find long explanations/complicated magical theories so distracting/unnecessary and ultimately implausible in their desperate goal to be plausible. The quick, no-nonsense setup you offered feels respectful of readers' intelligence. And it helps that Harry knows why and how because when Harry's reaction is "wait, what, this exists in the magical world?" then that's my reaction, too, because you're right, Harry, we never heard about it. But with grownup Harry knowing these things, with him showing us that yes, it totally exists, I know, I'm an Auror and have been here in the WW for years, so I KNOW, it gives the whole thing an air of plausibility, which I didn't expect to see. So, yes, cleverly done.
I love the flashback scenes throughout, showing us Scorpius's character and quick, vivid sketches of James, Rose and Al. I love that they were in the past tense. /structure-gasm <3 <3 <3
I have to mention the hair-ruffling scene especially because it perfectly illustrates why the sex scene worked for me so well. It's just, Harry; this Harry is so epilogue!Harry. Kind and gentle and affectionate, but also firm when he needs to be and just so fatherly. Which, unf. And that's him in that sex scene. Still so damn fatherly, even after getting pushed in that sexual encounter. I felt for him so much but at the same time, unf. God, Harry. It pushed all my uncomfortably-hot and fatherly!Harry buttons. And Scorpius, with daddy issues written all over him, wanting Harry to ruffle his hair and wanting Harry to fuck him. And I don't identify with him in that, but man, do I understand him and he breaks my heart with his wants.
And I love, love, love that Harry tried to Obliviate him (after spending a restless night at his desk. sdjfhsdkjfhksd. God, Harry, what you do to me!) And I ADORE that he didn't. That, more than anything, was the kind of heroism that made me think, Oh! Only you, Harry. Only you. Because, my God, the consequences; I don't even want to think about them and Harry was fully aware of them, but Scorpius begged and Harry just couldn't and not casting that spell was so brave. I loved Harry in that moment so much. SO MUCH. *heartseyes*
And this this this:
My body throbs where he was inside me. Harry Potter. My first. That one little piece of his heart is mine and I'll always have it. I'll lock it up tight and keep it safe where no one can touch it and no one can take it away.
*groan* As much as I'm distressed because of what Harry will have to face, I'm so happy (or, happily heartbroken) for Scorpius, because he has this and he wanted it so much and he gets to keep it, and God, you stupid, poor, darling boy.
Just gorgeous, bb. ALL THE HEARTS. <3 <3 <3