What an interesting story. The magical premise is simple and makes the plot immediately believable. It allows you to really take your time in describing how it makes the characters feel, which is obviously what any story worth anyone's time should be about.
To me, Scorpius is clearly happy with what is happening, although it's unlikely that he could have been planning it (unless he had time to do research about those magical artefacts he hears about when "pottering" near the lake, which is possible I suppose)
The most interesting character for me is Harry, who is visibly struggling throughout everything (maybe too visibly, as a show of good faith?). A seasoned Auror like him should not feel so guilty about something he does only as a duty. His endless fretting implies to me quite clearly that he feels himself oddly aroused by this turn of events and can't cope with the revelation. If it was only a duty for him to make sure Scorpius sees another sunrise, wouldn't he have volunteered to bottom for instance? It'd have made it easier for him to rationalize his actions and erase his fears about physically hurting Scorpius.... It'd have been the obvious way to go if he was really distressed about the situation.
I'm actually a bit sad this particular conversation does not come up in your story. I wonder how it would have turned out between those characters. I usually don't care who tops or who bottoms but in this particular instance, I feel like it could have some significance.
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Date: 2012-03-07 04:38 pm (UTC)To me, Scorpius is clearly happy with what is happening, although it's unlikely that he could have been planning it (unless he had time to do research about those magical artefacts he hears about when "pottering" near the lake, which is possible I suppose)
The most interesting character for me is Harry, who is visibly struggling throughout everything (maybe too visibly, as a show of good faith?). A seasoned Auror like him should not feel so guilty about something he does only as a duty. His endless fretting implies to me quite clearly that he feels himself oddly aroused by this turn of events and can't cope with the revelation. If it was only a duty for him to make sure Scorpius sees another sunrise, wouldn't he have volunteered to bottom for instance? It'd have made it easier for him to rationalize his actions and erase his fears about physically hurting Scorpius.... It'd have been the obvious way to go if he was really distressed about the situation.
I'm actually a bit sad this particular conversation does not come up in your story. I wonder how it would have turned out between those characters. I usually don't care who tops or who bottoms but in this particular instance, I feel like it could have some significance.
Cheers.